Avoid Irrelevant Topics And Redundancy While Writing a Unique Article
Rule: Don’t open up topics you don’t want to discuss in the article. Always avoid irrelevant or trifling topics.
Now this family is in trouble. They had an engine-boat, the main source of their income, but it went under water a couple of days ago. They had a dozen of cattle most of which have died. They had an ancient building, which they built about fifty years ago- a long time indeed; my grandfather was very young then- but they lost it too during the liberation war. How sad it is to see good people in danger!
In the above passage the bold-faced part doesn’t agree with the rest of the paragraph. It, in other words, is totally irrelevant. The inclusion of such expressions or sentences in any paragraph is considered a major weakness on the part of the writer. Sometimes even grammatical flaws in writing are overlooked, but such anomaly destroys the unity of paragraphs.
Rule: Don’t huddle up your sentences with too many verbs and verbals (non-finite verbs) so that the meaning is indirect and they look awkward. Use short-cut, direct verbs or verb phrases. Don’t use passive forms of verbs unnecessarily.
Wordy: That accident set me starting to think.
Concise: That accident set me thinking.
Wordy: He was made to agree to stop writing.
Concise: He was made to stop writing.
Wordy: This plan is deemed to be likely to serve to help cover the past losses.
Concise: This plan is likely to help cover the past losses.
Wordy: It goes to mean that nobody will stand to get the money back.
Concise: It means that nobody will get the money back.
Wordy: Sabuj-the Bipu Sona says that Nishat Sultana Rome doesn’t deserve to get such a big salary.
Concise: Sabuj-the Bipu Sona says that Nishat Sultana Rome doesn’t deserve such a big salary.
Wordy: Sabuj- the Bipu Sona must do the job of making it possible to help them stop smoking.
Concise: Sabuj- the Bipu Sona must help them stop smoking.
Rule: Avoid redundancy.
In English, people often make such mistakes. “Return”, for example, means “to come back”, and so it’s redundant to say or write:
Return back soon.
The correct form will be either
Or, Come back soon.
Here are some more examples of redundancy.
Redundant: The meaning of the word “ersatz” means “not genuine”
Standard: The meaning of the word “ersatz” is “not genuine”
Or, The word “replacement” means “not genuine”
Redundant: The two twins are playing.
Standard: The twins are playing.
Redundant: We advanced/proceeded/progressed forward.
Standard: We advanced.
Or, We went forward.
Redundant: The water is sufficient enough for the production.
Standard: The water is sufficient/enough for the production.
Redundant: Let’s join the two ends of the rope together.
Standard: Let’s join the two ends of the rope.
Redundant: Nishat Sultana of Rome has returned back in Sabuj- the Bipu Sona’s life.
Standard: Nishat Sultana of Rome has come back in Sabuj- the Bipu Sona’s life.
Or, Nishat Sultana Rimu has returned in Sabuj- the Bipu Sona’s life.
Redundant: Repeat again what you said.
Standard: Repeat what you said.
Redundant: This process is the management’s new innovation.
Standard: This process is the management’s innovation.
(But “new invention” is a standard expression)
Redundant: These two pictures are same identical.
Standard: These two pictures are same/identical.
Redundant: The reason he died is because he drank some poisonous liquid.
Standard: The reason he died is that he drank some poisonous liquid.
Likewise, “the time when” and “the place where” are redundant expressions.
, Mahbub Hasan ,http://ezinearticles.com/expert/Mahbub_Hasan/2053706